It really was a simple task.
I dug and dug and dug real deep,
Deep into the sandy heap.
At the bottom there was a great surprise,
I couldn't believe my very own eyes!
Because in the ground there lay a moon-beam,
I could have swore it was a dream.
But when I touched the warm, safe light,
Something happened and I squeezed my eyes tight.
The white waves crashed in,
They changed the colour of my skin.
The water sucked me in and I nearly drowned,
And that's when I heard a sound.
It all was quite a mystery,
but that is how I became the sea.
A good start - I would take another edit through, saying it aloud, and try to find lines where you have too many syllables, or awkward syllable counts, and that would be a key improvement.
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